This is a lovely meditation on God's care for the sparrows and for us. The parallel themes in each of the central stanzas are impressively compact and fitting. It runs along very nicely.
I think, however, that it might be even stronger without that final stanza (or with some kind of revision to it). I believe I see what you are trying to do there, but I'm not sure that it actually works as well as it might. I just don't think this is a “Tyger Tyger” situation. Why? I couldn't tell you that, unfortunately. It's only my instinct and my ear. Maybe someday.
Beautiful poem <3
Thank you, Héctor!
This is a beautiful poem and so well said. With your permission I would would love to share it in a Bible study time.
You most certainly have my permission. Thanks for the kind words, Jon!
Your welcome. Thank you for sharing
Aww this so sweet, needed to read it this morning!
That makes me so happy to hear. Thanks, Hayley!
This is a lovely meditation on God's care for the sparrows and for us. The parallel themes in each of the central stanzas are impressively compact and fitting. It runs along very nicely.
I think, however, that it might be even stronger without that final stanza (or with some kind of revision to it). I believe I see what you are trying to do there, but I'm not sure that it actually works as well as it might. I just don't think this is a “Tyger Tyger” situation. Why? I couldn't tell you that, unfortunately. It's only my instinct and my ear. Maybe someday.
Yes 🙌🏼 💗 Beautiful.
The earth truly does proclaim His glory. I am so thankful for birds. Love the poem, Ali!
I love this! So beautiful!
Beautiful!
Ali, I love this. Such a sweet, simple, and beautiful piece of God’s love and faithfulness.